Old 05-17-2017, 06:48 AM   #1
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https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/signs/s-wlxfm

There she is.

Looking for feedback on the mix and i would like to know if how it makes you feel. Enjoy listening

V 3 - With reverb and eq changes! https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/signs-1/s-9IrgU

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Old 05-17-2017, 05:10 PM   #2
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Very neat, leave it alone! I found myself singing some weird stuff to this. Cool.
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Old 05-18-2017, 02:16 AM   #3
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Awesome thanks for the feedback
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Old 05-25-2017, 09:03 AM   #4
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Woot woot!no one wanted it..
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Old 05-25-2017, 01:47 PM   #5
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Missed this one. I'm not so fond of instrumentals, but this is really great.
Great work!
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Old 05-27-2017, 11:13 AM   #6
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Hey Luke,

I liked this a lot! If I had to criticise, I would say maybe your kick is a little loud? Personally I like softer piano sounds, but that's just a personal thing. Apart from that, it's very sweet production. I love the details like the airy 'pfff' on the 4th beat at certain points.

I hope you are related to Ron Swanson.
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Old 05-28-2017, 09:12 AM   #7
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For me it sounds good overall, it's just the balance. As Amether, I think the kick is a little loud, but so is the bass. They both dominate when everything is playing. They should to a degree, I just think it's too much of a degree as is.
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Old 06-03-2017, 02:26 AM   #8
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Hmm interesting. Ill definitely come back with a corrected mix.

Also what do you mean by softer? Like less 2 to 6k? Or are you talking velocity?
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Old 06-03-2017, 02:57 AM   #9
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I really want to get this track signed by a record label but I guess it's not hitting home with anyone. Is it just the mix that needs help or does the track just plain suck. I really need some honesty here guys. Thanks
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Old 06-03-2017, 04:53 AM   #10
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Hmm interesting. Ill definitely come back with a corrected mix.

Also what do you mean by softer? Like less 2 to 6k? Or are you talking velocity?
I meant strictly volume. I think the mix sounds fine, it was only the balance that caught my attention.
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Old 06-03-2017, 06:02 AM   #11
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Awesome. Uploading new version. I think this one sounds quite a bit different. Hopefully, for the better.
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Old 06-03-2017, 07:22 AM   #12
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https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/signs-1/s-9IrgU

Here she is. Id like to know which one you guys like better. Thanks again guys. I owe it to ya

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Old 06-04-2017, 02:50 AM   #13
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Nice. If it were my track I would keep the brushes/shaker sound and also add some kind of conventional snare drum but thats only my subjective opinion of course, well done.
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Old 06-04-2017, 06:22 AM   #14
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Thanks morgon, Okay so I did try what you suggested but my gut was saying a snare wasn't the right piece to use. Maybe I could try a softer snare if I can find it.

Btw heres a version 3, More reverb and some eq changes.

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/signs-1/s-9IrgU

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Old 06-05-2017, 09:05 AM   #15
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Scratch that

New version. Sorry

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Old 06-05-2017, 03:11 PM   #16
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^^Yeh that's good too, I quite like the treatment of the version in post #14 though.
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That's pretty nice, I like the vibe. Mechanically/production wise it all sounds great to me.

Regarding content it's a bit repetitive for my taste - maybe I need to pay more attention to the textures but it could use something extra towards the end.

I do like it though, and my wife said it was nice also.
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Thanks alot for all your help guys, With your help ive been able to finish yet another track.

Ill be releasing this track for free and i encourage you to download it and listen at your pleasure.

Stay tuned for final version with vocals.. Thanks all.
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Final!

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswanssonm...ght-sunshine21

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Hi Luke. The last version isn't there for the moment. Speaking of the previous one,
to my taste, it sound's very nice. The mix looks to be ok.
Honestly, I have a problem with the "clap thing".
Your kick is really good. As someone says, you have to keep this shaker for the atmosphere, and I think with a honest snare, maybe a smooth one, you'll have the thing ok.
To me the claps doesn't look so "in the rhythm" and their sound looks a little cheap.

At last, maybe a little more things in the middle to avoid some monotony.

That's a pure subjective opinion but I think you asked so. Finally, for me, it's a very cool piece that needs a few things to be really great. Like your style.

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