Old 04-18-2017, 06:26 PM   #1
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Default I Can't Jump (March 2017 Song)

My newest song is "I Can't Jump". I used one of the episodes from the tv show "Cheers", as the blue print for this one.

https://www.reverbnation.com/silverb...90-i-cant-jump

First there's the shock
Than There's pain
Than there's the ping pong blame
I shared my side
She said I'm right
Still I sleep alone at night
And Every night is long without her
And the reasons that she gone is just a blur

Chorus

I'm so bloody sad
But I can't jump
I've lost all I had
But I can't jump
Every thing gone wrong, yeah it's all bad
I'm so bloody sad
But I can't jump

I lost my joy
Lost my sun
I lost her way of fun
She filled my need
She made my day
She left me wishing shed stay
And every day is dull without her
And the reasons that she gone is just a blur

Repeat chorus

My whole world's been so much duller
Since she's been gone my life been smaller
I've been such a mess, but I can't jump

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Old 04-19-2017, 04:18 AM   #2
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I like the song but for me there is too much distance between the backing and the vocals. I'd like to hear it with your vocal recorded nearer the mic. Just my twopenn'orth.
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