(song) Come Talk to Me

[RDBOIS]

Come Talk to Me is a new song I'm working on: it needs a better mix and mastering (i.e. pseudo-mastering is all I can do).

I don't have good monitors so please let me know what it sounds like on your side. If you can critique and suggest some edits that would nice. Do you recommend some EQ or volume boosts/cuts, or anything else?


Thanks.

https://soundcloud.com/consciousgrooves/cometalk-to-me


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Song topic:

What if you met, for just a brief moment, the most amazing spiritual being that was made of pure boundless consciousness. While you could not see this being you could feel its power, presence and love, and communicate with telepathically. This experience would be so overwhelming and beyond anything you had experienced in your lifetime. It would next to impossible to explain.

If you had to write a song in regards to this event what would be the lyrics?

This is what I came up with:

(note: some parts are in French, as with all my songs, sorry about that)


COME TALK TO ME
Conscious Grooves

Em-G-A-G (x2)
One of the things that I contemplate is what I think you are
I tell myself I need to know the mystery but I can’t
Pour croire en toi j’ai essayé l’effort est demeuré total
L’écart était trop grand l’affaire me tourmentait le mental

Em-G-A-G (x2)
Patiently in many ways got all the time in the world
It would be nice for me to find so I can free my mind

CHORUS

Bm-D-A-Bm

Going to places in meaningful ways
The search is forever, the questions remain

C- Bm- C- Bm

I don’t need to follow delusions of the mind

C-A-B

So why don`t you come talk to me

Em-G-A-G (x2)
Show me now that you care I’m waiting here in the dark
Can’t you see I’m ready to bear the shining light the spark
J’ai l’impression que tu m’évite le doute s’est installé
La certitude se détériore ma conviction s’égare

Em-G-A-G (x2)
They told me now that I was lost in all the things I thought
I needed to turn my life around so you can mystify

CHORUS ---
Break - Em-G-A-G (x4)
CHORUS

[OPI]

Your on a roll dude. My thoughts..

This track really needs some "HEY!" chants on some of the snare beats.

The lead sine/triangle wave is awesome and just fits the track perfectly.

Nice guitar, Not over processed

45 second mark was kind of abrupt. You gave me no clue that was comin'. Same with the 2:00 mark and 3:07 mark. Also the 1:16 mark was a bit odd.


Also i love the vocal bends after the 44 second mark and later on in the track. really gave me something different. oh yeah and nice lyrics. The vocal improved from your last track definitely. Keep working.

As you can see, i dont really like giving critiques on mixing You can always be sure that i want more kick though haha good job mate

[mschnell]

Originally Posted by RDBOIS

(note: some parts are in French, as with all my songs, sorry about that)

I do like that. We do several songs with English and Portuguese parts as our singer is from Rio .
-Michael

[RDBOIS]

Originally Posted by OPI

Your on a roll dude. My thoughts..

This track really needs some "HEY!" chants on some of the snare beats.

The lead sine/triangle wave is awesome and just fits the track perfectly.

Nice guitar, Not over processed

45 second mark was kind of abrupt. You gave me no clue that was comin'. Same with the 2:00 mark and 3:07 mark. Also the 1:16 mark was a bit odd.


Also i love the vocal bends after the 44 second mark and later on in the track. really gave me something different. oh yeah and nice lyrics. The vocal improved from your last track definitely. Keep working.

As you can see, i dont really like giving critiques on mixing You can always be sure that i want more kick though haha good job mate

Thanks for the comments.

I actually might try adding some "hey" bits. Could be fun to hear in there.

Hmmmm... I actually was aiming for sharp transitions between song sections. I'm willing to entertain the idea of setting up "clues" that this transition is coming, but I'm not too sure how to get there. Besides for a drum fill (which I think I put in there) and a reversed'n'reverb bit (which I got in there) how would suggest I add such clues? Some synth sound increasing in volume 2-5 seconds before a change?

I can add more kick. I wasn't sure of the level because I don't have good monitors.

[GreggS]

Just an FYI ... there is a facebook group HMS1 Connect, admin is Dave Maxey, he teaches mixing/mastering in home studio environments and his DAW of choice is Reaper.If ya join this site you can pick up all kinds of info re: mixing ... blessings on ya <><