Old 04-20-2012, 04:10 PM   #1
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I should add it is only half way there and the lyrics are freestyle. Just thought I'd put it out there. cheers for any tips
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p.s. I am a hobby ocd user of reaper so be nice.
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Old 04-24-2012, 03:18 PM   #2
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It's OK. If you're gonna rap, I suggest that you write lyrics and rap them more confidently, right now it sounds kinda "limp." The beat is fine, but it's just an 8-bar loop repeated a lot of times. There should be a progression: an intro, verses, maybe a refrain, and maybe an outro.
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Old 04-25-2012, 03:46 AM   #3
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Thanks for listening. Yeah, think that is a definite with writing things down first. I don't consider myself a hot rapper but improvement always is there with considered effort.
As far as structure goes of song that's always somewhere I need to not be so lazy with.
Thanks for ya time
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Old 04-25-2012, 05:29 PM   #4
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No problem. Sorry I'm so critical but if you're looking for critiques, that's what I gave.
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Old 04-26-2012, 01:24 PM   #5
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actually, i liked the 'mellow' rap. sounded kinda smooth to me--and a change up from being screamed at (tho i like that too--but everybody does it). not so crazy about the 'London Bridge' break, but that's purely personal--doesn't break the song.
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