Old 05-17-2016, 05:59 PM   #1
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Put this tune together this evening.

Feedback and input appreciated.

... reworked below

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Old 05-18-2016, 04:43 PM   #2
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Re-worked this track this evening.
New bits any good?

**new mix

https://soundcloud.com/landslide-vic...ing-in-tongues

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Old 05-18-2016, 05:34 PM   #3
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a lot of really nice melodic thoughts going on! i think where the song needs work is making it a little more interesting. it's gets a little monotonous after awhile. i'm not an expert on Electronic Pop - but i could easily hear this in a dance club somewhere. if that were the case, I would probably expect a little more oomph from the low-end. Specifically the kick and bass. I think you could "spice" those up a little to add a lot of energy to the piece. It sounds like you might have a little verb on the synth providing the rhythm? if so, i'd remove that to provide more clarity and depth.

Just a couple thoughts for whatever it's worth. You have a great start with those beautiful ethereal melodies!
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Old 05-18-2016, 05:36 PM   #4
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Too much reverb and delay. You'll get a more upfront sound if you back off a bit.
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Old 05-18-2016, 06:01 PM   #5
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Thank you, mschuster and OPI.

Will work on what you have advised.

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Old 05-20-2016, 12:33 PM   #6
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Feedback and advice taken on board, I've changed a few things.
Am I moving in the right direction?

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