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12-20-2015, 05:35 AM
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Aug 2008
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And We - finally finishing a song about a... "flexible" relationship.
And We
Any and all feedback on composition, recording, production, etc. is very much appreciated. Going for kind of an "indie pop" sound with this one.
Cheers!
kenzo
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12-20-2015, 06:58 AM
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Banned
Join Date: Jun 2015
Location: Lower Rhine Area, DE
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uuh ... "fexible" relationship. thats a really bad idea.
in general I think the mix is ok, but the voice is way too upfront.
and the lyrics are really ... meh. IMHO. and it isnt dirty enough overall, with all the bang bang and so.
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12-20-2015, 08:20 AM
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Thanks for the comments! I also thought the voice was too high in the mix at one point and dialed it back - maybe I need to keep dialing. The lyrics were kind of a choice between naughty and dirty, but we could always create a "Dirty Edit" version...
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Originally Posted by LightOfDay
uuh ... "fexible" relationship. thats a really bad idea.
in general I think the mix is ok, but the voice is way too upfront.
and the lyrics are really ... meh. IMHO. and it isnt dirty enough overall, with all the bang bang and so.
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12-20-2015, 08:24 AM
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The last line in each verse just sounds awkward to me, it is stretched out over far too much time.
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12-20-2015, 08:45 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by kenzo
Thanks for the comments! I also thought the voice was too high in the mix at one point and dialed it back - maybe I need to keep dialing. The lyrics were kind of a choice between naughty and dirty, but we could always create a "Dirty Edit" version...
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you are not allowed to post "explicit lyrics"-versions in here, I think?
and I meant with "dirty" more the sound and the music. its too clean, always IMHO.
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12-21-2015, 04:54 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Fergler
The last line in each verse just sounds awkward to me, it is stretched out over far too much time.
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Will listen to that again, thanks for the comment!
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12-24-2015, 07:41 AM
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Human being with feelings
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Quote:
Originally Posted by LightOfDay
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in general I think the mix is ok, but the voice is way too upfront.
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I took your advice and pulled the lead vocal back about 1.5dB, I think it does blend better now. Thanks again!
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12-26-2015, 02:28 AM
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Human being with feelings
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I like the idea and the cheeky lyrics. Just lacked some of the excitement necessary for this type of song imho.
I think the lead vocal melody could benefit from some support, maybe a pad or some strings playing harmony or something in some choice place.
And where are the tambourines for the chorus?
And at around 2:30 for the outro under the vocals a crazy wailing solo guitar solo duelling with the bass which has now got dirtier sounding and fatter - but both of these are pushed back in the mix like it's leaking from the appartment next door.
That's what I want to hear anyhow.
Failing that just a reduce the chorus/flanged accoustic guitar in the mix and put in some tambourines for the chorus.
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12-27-2015, 07:24 AM
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Bubble07
I like the idea and the cheeky lyrics. Just lacked some of the excitement necessary for this type of song imho.
I think the lead vocal melody could benefit from some support, maybe a pad or some strings playing harmony or something in some choice place.
And where are the tambourines for the chorus?
And at around 2:30 for the outro under the vocals a crazy wailing solo guitar solo duelling with the bass which has now got dirtier sounding and fatter - but both of these are pushed back in the mix like it's leaking from the appartment next door.
That's what I want to hear anyhow.
Failing that just a reduce the chorus/flanged accoustic guitar in the mix and put in some tambourines for the chorus.
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Wow, lots of great, specific ideas for us to work with. Thanks very much!
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05-01-2016, 03:11 AM
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Sep 2013
Location: North California
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Chimichangas are legit- my friend once told me a story of how he was trying to order a Chimichanga in his youth while going through puberty and his voice kept cracking. It's funnier to hear him tell the story verses some dude making a random comment on a music software forum- but I tried. Stay rad
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05-01-2016, 03:25 AM
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: May 2009
Location: Japan
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It really sounds like those risqué songs of the 80's..
I guess I'm listening to the revised mix, because the vocals didn't strike me as too loud.
you know what this song is missing?
Male back vocals. Especially for the ooh ooh bang bang part. I could totally hear a Barry white kind of guy going "bang bang" with the girl
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