Im nothing without you

[OPI]

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/without-you/s-Y3lem


This is a song I made today, I hope some of you enjoy it. Its Electronic but with mostly smooth tones, and is fairly empty.

Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

UPDATED LINK % MIX : https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/without-you-2/s-M3V8t

[OPI]

Updated the link with a better mix(lower kick).

[deeb]

Sounding good and natural! next ! : P

[sammydix]

Can't believe I'm using this word, but nice n punchy.

[L_Grizzle]

Sounds great!

Can I ask what you use for the drums/percussion? Samples or vst? They always sound great on your tracks.

If I were to offer a critique, I would say you could maybe play with the stereo field a little more. It's certainly not super narrow, but I think a little more extreme panning might make it even bigger/wider.

[msundh]

SHIT!! Not my glass of juice but I still ADORE IT!!!!!
I'm a follower!
Damn you're good!

[OPI]

Sounds great!

Can I ask what you use for the drums/percussion? Samples or vst? They always sound great on your tracks.

If I were to offer a critique, I would say you could maybe play with the stereo field a little more. It's certainly not super narrow, but I think a little more extreme panning might make it even bigger/wider.

I use a combination of recorded claps and snaps and samples. I dont have a snare so the snare you hear in the first drop of the chorus is a sample recorded from someones vintage kit.

Then When Im recording it doesnt nearly sound like crisp samples you hear in the expensive sample packs you find on the interscape, so I use ALOT of saturation and EQ.

And more stereo will come, thats a good idea.

[OPI]

SHIT!! Not my glass of juice but I still ADORE IT!!!!!
I'm a follower!
Damn you're good!


Yes! Every follower counts my man :) Thanks msundh

[grandmogul]

A big thumbs up for this!

Although presumably a totally different genre, it reminds me a bit on Zappa's "Amnerika" (https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v7msf3Fv06Q) in the way you mixed the vocal samples.

To take up L_Grizzle's proposal: some more stereo-field experimenting could bring even more life into this track. But I love it anyway!

[mschuster]

Lovely as always... Creativity abounds from start to finish... What a landscape you paint!

[morgon]

I'm really into these tracks you're making, what Mark said, very musically emotive, cheers Luke.

[OPI]

Thanks for the nice feedback guys.

Now i kmow your all being nice but let be honest , it aint perfect!

So, what would you add/remove to the track to improve it?

I would really love to release this on the "Nourish" youtube channel but atm my song pales in comparison

[morgon]

I didn't get a feeling of this track needing anything further, if I had to add something it might be some percussive flourishes toward the end, drum fills or such, or maybe some intermittent new fx voice , but again, probably only in the final 15 or 20 seconds or so.

[sammydix]

How do you mean "pales?" If it's the mix, it sounds great to me. If it's the arrangement, I don't think I'm "attuned" enough to make a good suggestion (unless something sounded obviously "off," which isn't the case for me).
The only thing I've noticed, that I think has been mentioned before, is that it sounds very L/R/C. I'd use more of the full stereo spectrum. But in your defense, I've heard other similar tunes with that same LRC sound, so I assume that's expected.

[OPI]

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/without-her/s-0ZfD6

Updated the mix and arrangement with some of your suggestions :)

Thanks for the tips guys, Tomorrow ill work on the bass notes a little

[Jorgen]

Very nice feel to it. Experimental and arty to my ears, and of course a touch of melancholia. And I like the origami bird. Tasteful, all in all.

[OPI]

Updated the track a bit :

Hope I didnt mess it up

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/without-you/s-psp9A

[OPI]

Annnnnddd another

https://soundcloud.com/lukeswansonmusic/without-you-2/s-M3V8t

Lowered the kick, changed the bass and hopefully improved the master. Reaching the final result!