Old 05-21-2017, 01:48 AM   #1
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Hi Reaper pals,

I need to submit this track soon for release and would REALLY appreciate some feedback on it. I always get great ideas from this crew. THANK YOU!

Updated version below...

https://soundcloud.com/steve-rosenbaum/kiss-my-wife-1

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Old 05-21-2017, 07:04 AM   #2
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Early Byrds vibe great mix. Sounds like a band. Great lyric idea. I want to kiss her now!
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Old 05-21-2017, 07:37 AM   #3
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Great stuff - I dig it! Nice production.
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Old 05-24-2017, 01:39 PM   #4
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Thanks very much to barrymk and trevlyns for taking the time to listen and comment.

I'm still interested in any comments, especially suggestions for improvements, that anyone might have.

THANKS!
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Old 05-24-2017, 02:20 PM   #5
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Maybe start with fewer instruments, no harmonies.
i.e. there is no build up.
Around 2:44, end of solo, some echo effects? The vox seems too dry in that break.
The break should be 'quieter' and more kaboom when it ends.
Maybe the lead vox could be a db or two higher.
The harmonies could be clearer.The lead vox and bg Vox seems to melt together, muddy.
The 'I wanna kiss my wife' part lack emphasis.
Maybe rerecord with a less laid back style.
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Old 05-27-2017, 10:07 AM   #6
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msundh, these are all great suggestions! Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments. I will implementing many if not all.
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Updated version in the first post. Thanks!
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Old 06-11-2017, 05:35 AM   #8
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Don't remember the previous version, but this do sounds great.
No complaints this time
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I have no wish to analyse this song. It's simply bloody good. There's that Byrds crossed with Happy Days vibe. "Are you ready for the osculating life?" sheer brilliance! A pop song to be proud of and you don't hear that very often. Puts a smile on yer face.
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Old 06-11-2017, 04:51 PM   #10
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Sounds great now, the first version was good but this one is excellent, cheers.
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