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05-21-2017, 01:48 AM
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: San Diego
Posts: 130
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Please give a listen and some feedback (Song: Kiss My Wife)
Hi Reaper pals,
I need to submit this track soon for release and would REALLY appreciate some feedback on it. I always get great ideas from this crew. THANK YOU!
Updated version below...
https://soundcloud.com/steve-rosenbaum/kiss-my-wife-1
Last edited by Steve R; 06-11-2017 at 03:38 AM.
Reason: Updated link
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05-21-2017, 07:04 AM
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#2
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Mar 2010
Location: Stratford upon Avon UK
Posts: 1,291
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Early Byrds vibe great mix. Sounds like a band. Great lyric idea. I want to kiss her now!
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05-21-2017, 07:37 AM
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#3
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Dec 2011
Location: Rhode Island, New England
Posts: 1,665
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Great stuff - I dig it! Nice production.
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05-24-2017, 01:39 PM
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#4
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: San Diego
Posts: 130
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Thanks very much to barrymk and trevlyns for taking the time to listen and comment.
I'm still interested in any comments, especially suggestions for improvements, that anyone might have.
THANKS!
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05-24-2017, 02:20 PM
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#5
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: Sweden
Posts: 2,194
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Maybe start with fewer instruments, no harmonies.
i.e. there is no build up.
Around 2:44, end of solo, some echo effects? The vox seems too dry in that break.
The break should be 'quieter' and more kaboom when it ends.
Maybe the lead vox could be a db or two higher.
The harmonies could be clearer.The lead vox and bg Vox seems to melt together, muddy.
The 'I wanna kiss my wife' part lack emphasis.
Maybe rerecord with a less laid back style.
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05-27-2017, 10:07 AM
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#6
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: San Diego
Posts: 130
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msundh, these are all great suggestions! Thank you very much for your thoughtful comments. I will implementing many if not all.
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06-11-2017, 03:40 AM
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#7
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Jan 2007
Location: San Diego
Posts: 130
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Updated version in the first post. Thanks!
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06-11-2017, 05:35 AM
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#8
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Feb 2013
Location: Sweden
Posts: 2,194
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Don't remember the previous version, but this do sounds great.
No complaints this time
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06-11-2017, 06:28 AM
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#9
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Mar 2010
Location: Stratford upon Avon UK
Posts: 1,291
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I have no wish to analyse this song. It's simply bloody good. There's that Byrds crossed with Happy Days vibe. "Are you ready for the osculating life?" sheer brilliance! A pop song to be proud of and you don't hear that very often. Puts a smile on yer face.
Last edited by barrymk; 06-11-2017 at 06:33 AM.
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06-11-2017, 04:51 PM
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#10
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Human being with feelings
Join Date: Nov 2012
Location: 'straya
Posts: 9,409
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Sounds great now, the first version was good but this one is excellent, cheers.
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