Old 04-04-2018, 01:52 AM   #1
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Working on a new song idea. Recorded an instrumental track and wrote some lyrics this morning. I suspect the music without lyrics may not sound inspiring yet, but I feel the lyrics will take the song to a new level.

Before I merge the two, feedback on what I have so far is welcome.

DENIAL
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

Deep down, inside of me
Is a deep, gaping hole
Down in there, is a fire
Burning out of control

I can’t take this any more
It burns me to the core
All you see’s one side of the aisle
Faced with the facts
All we get, is, a denial

Denial, of the truth
Denial, of the youth
Denial, of end of times
This time, it’s we, that will, deny you!

Far away, you waged war
In a fear, of horrific weapons
A blind eye, you deny
Daily home aggression

I can’t take this any more
Our voice you can’t ignore
All you see’s one side of the aisle
Faced with the facts
All we get, is, a denial

Denial, of the truth
Denial, of the youth
Denial, of end of times
This time, it’s we, that will, deny you!

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-lint...without-lyrics
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Old 04-05-2018, 12:55 PM   #2
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The mix sounds good so far! Maybe a little repetitive, but I think that'll be cured once the vocals are recorded. Definitely post when you have them recorded - it's hard to comment on lyrics without hearing how they blend with the rest of the track.
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Old 04-05-2018, 03:22 PM   #3
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Recorded the first two verses and choruses. Still work in progress. Feedback welcome:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/denial-v1
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Old 04-05-2018, 08:56 PM   #4
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I'm hearing a lots of echoverb in the vocals. It's very dry up front and very swamped in the back.

I suspect you cranked up the pre-delay on the verb with some darkened delay?

I guess it's a question of taste. I'm a 'less is more' type.
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Old 04-06-2018, 12:30 AM   #5
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I'm hearing a lots of echoverb in the vocals. It's very dry up front and very swamped in the back.

I suspect you cranked up the pre-delay on the verb with some darkened delay?

I guess it's a question of taste. I'm a 'less is more' type.
Hi, thanks for the feedback. I was going for a 90s kind a feel but agree after the car test that I overdid it. I will back them off in the next version. I do think the vocals can be better so I may retrack them. Autotune is the work of the devil, so I will also correct any out of key vocals by comping. A guitar solo is in the cards, and I was also thinking of some harmonies or gang vocals. Stay tuned!
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Old 04-08-2018, 08:13 AM   #6
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Worked further on the song structure. Here is an updated demo. I would like to retrack the vocals and guitars as they are no in timing and key in places. Feedback welcome on what I have so far however:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton-3/denial-v2
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Old 04-16-2018, 01:36 PM   #7
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I really dig it Jon. sounds great to me. Great snare sound.

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