Old 05-29-2021, 01:35 AM   #1
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Hi all,

New song "Paradise" written and recorded this morning:

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-linton5/paradise

LYRICS:
I see the look in your eyes
Heaven’s slipped away
From you
Come to me and baptize
But there’s price to pay

Forgive him lord
For he has sinned
Pocket’s bulgin’
We’ll let him

I am the agent divine
Path to eternal life
Come
I’ll take you to a
Paid paradise
Leave your sins with me
Leave your money behind
Let me take you to a
Paid paradise

Pay no mind what you hear
Them boys love it here
They came to me and baptized
I showed them paradise

Forgive him lord
Much more than the rest
He has great riches
So give him best

I am the agent divine
Path to eternal life
Come
I’ll take you to a
Paid paradise
Leave your sins with me
Leave your money behind
Let me take you to a
Paid paradise

A paid paradise!

Thank you lord
For a path from sin
All they can afford
I give to them

I am the agent divine
Path to eternal life
Come
I’ll take you to a
Paid paradise
Leave your sins with me
Leave your money behind
Let me take you to a
Paid paradise

A paid paradise!
(Amen)
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Old 05-29-2021, 03:50 AM   #2
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Bravo Jona .... a nice song. I find in some vocal nuances a bit of "Bowie" (spontaneous). Congratulations .... "arrives" well.

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Old 06-06-2021, 03:50 PM   #3
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Hey, man, have loved listening to your tracks over the years and listening to you find your own style and sound.

I'm not sure what you are looking for in terms of feedback, but I think the bass could be louder and the snare isn't quite dialed in yet. Maybe gate the reverb a bit or EQ the tale?

Definitely a fan! Thanks for posting.
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