I'm Not Dead Yet

[SilverBeat]

"I'm Not Dead Yet" is my November 2017 song. This song was written about my own feelings, as well as for those that are not willing to let go of dreams. For those that keep pushing on no matter how hard it is.

https://www.reverbnation.com/silverb...m-not-dead-yet

Happy Christmas,
Terry

I feel like I've been running out of time
It's a feeling I've had so very long
I've been on this road for a dream of mine
It's never faded, it's just as strong
There's a need in my heart that seems to grow
With each passing day I come to know
Well I'm not so sure if I'll ever reach the top
But I'm Sure I'm never gonna stop.

Chorus

Some say, what the use in trying
For what I'll Probable never get
I say, I'll try until I die
And I'm not dead yet

I trust in my own reason to believe
And I believe in time I will Succeed
I'm just not so sure when that day will be
I'm only curteen it's what I need


Repeat Chorus

Work my fingers to the bone
With pain I scream
I work my fingers to the bone
For more than just a dream

[RDBOIS]

Originally Posted by SilverBeat

"I'm Not Dead Yet" is my November 2017 song. This song was written about my own feelings, as well as for those that are not willing to let go of dreams. For those that keep pushing on no matter how hard it is.

It a good song. Has a good feel to it.

You have a bit of a Tom Petty tone in your vocal, which is cool.

There's a problem with the transition into the break/bridge near the end - the two sections don't flow into each other properly.

This is a personal things, it's not a big deal, but I feel the lyrics are a little rushed into the spaces provided for them. As a consequence, the lyrical melodies are short and spoken-like, rather than sung like undulating waves -- which is what I think would accompany the music better ---. For example, there's a few places where some vowels could be drawn out to lengthen words. This would fill in the spaces nicely and make the vocals more soothing and smooth for the soul-hearing. If you have a track of the song without the vocals I'd be glad to sing a few examples to illustrate my point.