Old 04-18-2015, 11:15 AM   #1
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Default Original Pop Rock Song - Children's Home

Re-recorded a original song of mine. Somethings on a softer vein.

https://soundcloud.com/jonathan-lint...-home-20150418

Critique on the song and mix welcome.

JONATHAN LINTON – CHILDREN’S HOME
(Words by Jonathan Linton, Music by Jonathan Linton)

8,000 years before, here on this sandy shore
Walked our forefathers here just trying to survive
If they were here today, they’d see we’ve gone astray
Destroy the world we live in so that we can strive

Nuclear race, atomic waste, forest erased, Stop!

We must change our way, stop throwing away
Too late for yesterday, but not too late today

Wake up, rise up, it’s up….to you
Stop relentless waste, end pollution haze
Before we find out there is no place left to roam
In our children’s home

All our technology, poured in weaponry
We kill our neighbors ‘cause of what they believe
Power from the air and sea, could be our destiny
But profit hungry ones pump oil to misconceive

Nuclear race, atomic waste, forest erased, Stop!

We must change our way, stop throwing away
Too late for yesterday, but not too late today

SOLO

We must speak in protest, abuse of man’s progress
We realize it wrong but feel a helpless fate
I’m one of a ten billion, how can I change what’s done
One voice that water drop that opens the flood gate

Nuclear race, atomic waste, forest erased, Stop!

We must change our way, stop throwing away
Too late for yesterday, but not too late today

Wake up, rise up, it’s up….to you
Stop relentless waste, end pollution haze
Before we find out there is no place left to roam
In our children’s home
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Old 04-24-2015, 12:58 AM   #2
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Vocals sound too bright and out front to me and out of pitch on occasion.
Overall not bad though.
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Old 04-24-2015, 03:05 AM   #3
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